Outline
1 first paragraph: introduction
· Purpose of the essay
2 second paragraph: general information
· Name and origin
· Personality, likes or dislikes
· Hobbies or occupation
3 third paragraph: experiences
· Positive experiences
· Reasons
4 fourth paragraph: goals
· General objectives
· Shot terms “5years”
· Long terms “10 years”
5 fifth paragraph: conclusion
· Why did i write this essay?
Introductory essay
The purpose of writing this essay is to introduce myself. If you are looking for information about me, you will find it here. On this essay you will find: my complete name, my age, my personality, my likes and dislikes, my hobbies, some memories and objectives. I hope this essay help you to know me better.
The purpose of writing this essay is to introduce myself. If you are looking for information about me, you will find it here. On this essay you will find: my complete name, my age, my personality, my likes and dislikes, my hobbies, some memories and objectives. I hope this essay help you to know me better.
My name is Mayra Gpe Razo M. Del Campo. I am nineteen years old. I was born in Aguascalientes, México. Life in this place is very comfortable and calm. My personality is soft, I do not like to get in fights, i just want to get some fun. I try to be responsible in everything that I do. I like to draw in Photoshop, flash and videogames are always good options too. I do not like nosy people and sunny days.
Some positive experiences that changed my life were for example: my high school, my actual boyfriend, and my friends. My high school friends and boyfriend changed my way of thinking because I thought that all people were bad and crazy because of the junior high school memories, but now it is very different. I decided to study “Human languages” because I am not able to understand computer languages such as C++, pascal, etc.
The objectives that I will achieve in 5 years are for example: I will finish the B.A. in ELT from the “Univesidad Autonoma de Aguascalientes”, I will get married and I will get a job in the cetis 155 or in the secondary number 3, maybe I will learn another language. And about long term goals maybe become a mother and keep working on a secondary or on a high school.
The purpose of writing this essay was to introduce myself, for other people to know me better. Most of what I do or how I think is written here: The important aspects that changed my mind, objectives, short-term goals and long-term goals (five to ten years) who am I? Where do I come from? All this is written here.
1° peer revision
ReplyDeleteby david novelo
1. Can you identify the main idea or thesis in this essay? Yes
2. If so, write the thesis here in this essay, I’m going to talk about me…
3. Does the thesis contain the author’s topic and their opinion or stand on this subject? Yes
4. Does this essay have an introduction? Yes
5. Does the introduction give an outline of what the author is going to talk about? Yes
6. Is the writing clear and understandable? Yes
7. Are there parts of the essay that are unclear? If so, underline them and put a question mark next to the passage. yes
8. Does the essay have a clearly organized middle section, with ideas separated into paragraphs? Yes
9. Does each paragraph begin with a topic sentence? Yes
10. Does each paragraph end with a transition sentence, smoothly connecting the ideas of the previous paragraph to the next? No
11. Does the essay have a concluding paragraph? Yes
12. Does the conclusion restate the main points of the essay in a new way and give a sense of completion to the essay? Yes
2° peer revision by: mariana
ReplyDeleteIs the writing interesting? Yes
Does the writing achieve the writer’s purpose? Yes
Are there enough details that distract the reader? Yes
Are unfamiliar terms explained or defined? No
Are ideas and details arranged in the best possible order? Yes
Are the logical connection between ideas and sentences clear? Yes
Is the meaning clear? Yes
Does the writing conain clichés or overworked phrases? No
Is the language appropriate for the audience and purpose? Yes
Do sentences read smoothly? Yes
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